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Nominator: WriterArtistDC (talk · contribs) 00:25, 31 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 06:26, 7 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking this up. WriterArtistDC (talk) 13:25, 7 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Will review around mid-February. :3 ❧ LunaEatsTuna (talk), proudly editing since 2018 (and just editing since 2017) – posted at 06:26, 7 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

General

• All non-English text should be in italics, like "awrah", "kokoro", etc.Done

Early childhood

• Wikilink infancy.Done
• "3 or 4" > "three or four" for consistency with the other mentions of age.Done
• "They have little understanding" > "Preschool children have little understanding" since they has been used successively quite a few times (avoids repetitions).Done
• Are "playing doctor" and "playing house" not also "sexual games"? If so, I would either remove this line or put "other sexual games", though perhaps it can be phrased even better.Done
• I would elaborate on the "not accompanied by strong feelings of anger, fear, or anxiety" point by, taking info from what the sources say, noting some specific examples of actions or practices that might be considered "problematic and require intervention" if possible.
  • I have reworded, but there are no examples given in the sources used, being high-level summaries not clinical articles. I can only assume that, having listed what is normal, other behaviors might be problematic, but it would be OR for me to say so..--WriterArtistDC (talk) 17:12, 5 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
• Does the source say what "professionals" entails? E.g. it is medial professionals, child psychologists or anyone who works with children in general? Changed to "child behavior specialists"

Late childhood and adolescence

• Wikilink privacy.See note below
• "Puberty begins at about age 10" – it is usually 10 for females and 11 for males; I would briefly note this gender discrepancy. Also:
• The above sentence is redundant with "Puberty occurs between ages 10 and 17"; I would replace this sentence by instead saying when it ends (noting both the average age range at which puberty concludes and the gender difference).
• "Behaviors between adolescents of the same age" – specify what type of behaviours (I presume it should just say sexual behaviours?).
  • I have reworded to removed "privacy" rather than wikilink, since that article is about informational privacy, not "bodily privacy". Also reworded to address the redundant definitions of puberty.--WriterArtistDC (talk) 16:10, 5 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Non-Western cultures

• Wikilink pedophiles.Done
• "and boys and girls playing naked outdoors on hot days" – should be "played" I think.Done
• "till she reaches" > "untill she reaches" for formality.Fixed typo
• "85%" – recommend "85 percent" for increased formality (this is optional and not a WP policy).I have always used the percent sign.

Japan

• In the first paragraph, briefly mention that the bathing rule applies to all ages so that its relevance to childhood nudity is immediately evident.Done
• "In the Tokugawa period in Japan" – no need to mention Japan here again since the reader knows this already.Done
• "became an issue for leaders" – specify "leaders".Done

Western cultures

More TBD!

• Will finish reply this evening.--WriterArtistDC (talk) 16:38, 5 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]