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Nominator: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 05:54, 15 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 01:35, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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My biggest concern is the lack of an architecture section, but the article is solid and has a good source mix in the Kennedy section. I also have some improvements to source citations to consider. Ping me when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:02, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@12george1 Are you done with the changes? The new Architecture section looks great. I contributed another clipping so Graulich is complete with page 1I; I'd have gone whole hog and clipped the whole of page 4I in one gulp instead of three separate clippings. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:52, 9 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie Yes, I am. That seems to be it for the Architecture section, which actually ended up being larger than I expected. Thanks for the review!--12george1 (talk) 07:21, 9 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

• One of these nominees (WTVX) is in the same area as the instant article. Who knows, someone might once have watched channel 34 in that house in the 80s or 90s!

I went looking for an Architecture section but didn't find it. I understand this property has had trouble being listed and reports may have been pre-internet, but a discussion of architectural features somewhere is merited. Right now, there's very limited and scattered info in this article about modifications and general style.

• "Mediterranean Revival style" shouldn't be hyphenated. (Also in the early history section)

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• "spacious living quarters." MOS:LOGICAL pull the period outside of the quotation mark. (This occurs a few other times.)

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• Kennedy Sr. also hired Maurice Fatio, an architect with several notable works, to design a two-floor car garage, pool pavilion, and tennis court. He also enlarged the estate by purchasing adjacent land. Drop the "also" in the first sentence to avoid consecutive sentences of "also".

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• The two paragraphs about failed listing attempts awkwardly split the William Kennedy Smith rape trial information. The introductory sentence is two paragraphs before the explanatory content.

• I decided to tack the details about the rape trial to the end of that paragraph because it's only two sentences--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• Nicknaming the house Castillo del Mar ("castle by the sea"), the Castles retained furnishings from the Kennedys in several rooms, he added fireplaces and replaced some windows and doors. Comma splice, and the "he" is unclear because it's "the Castles" and not "Castle".

• I got rid of "he" because the source doesn't actually specify that John K. Castle made those changes--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• Hyphenate "15-year"

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• The Florida Times-Union attribution should be to the Palm Beach Daily News.

• Oops. Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• In June 2020, Goldman sold La Querida to its current owners, Carl and Mary Jane Panattoni for $70 million. Add a comma after "Panattoni" to complete the appositive.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• [16] appears to be reprinted from The New York Times. The original is in TimesMachine (paywall) [1] as "Kennedy Plans to Appoint Harriman a Roving Envoy: Roosa, New York Banker, to Manage U.S. Debt—Landis Is Given Job" by W.H. Lawrence, Dec. 30, 1960, pages 1 and 8.
• [18] should attribute The Palm Beach Post as the original publication, having apparently been syndicated to The Florida Times-Union.

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• [28] should be Atlanta, not Atlantic. (It looks like this is a joint Sunday edition and the paper should be credited as The Atlanta Journal/The Atlanta Constitution.)

• Done--12george1 (talk) 02:41, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewed: 1, 2, 16, 17, 29. No textual issues.

There is one PD-USGov image and two images from the Florida Memory Project. A fourth image is CC0 from the nominator. Encouragement: Add alt text to images for accessibility purposes.