This review is transcluded from Talk:First Anglo–Ashanti War/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Setergh (talk · contribs) 17:52, 14 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 07:49, 23 February 2025 (UTC) Picking this one up. Review to follow after a brief message from our bot. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:49, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I'm open to it! It is my first GA-class, so honestly I don't expect it to do well whatsoever, but hey one can hope. Thank you for taking it on! Setergh (talk) 09:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Mostly matters of prose and style.

• Unlink "United Kingdom" and "Denmark"
  • Done

• "Britain and the Ashanti Empire were willing to make peace, however the Fante delayed this all the way to 1831." "however" -> but", "all the way to" -> "until"
  • Thank you for fixing this!

• " 600 ounces" Add conversion template to convert troy ounces to grams
  • Done

    I have corrected this. In In the olde measurements, precious metals like gold were measured in troy ounces (ozt). Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:37, 25 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• "including a ninefoot scarlet umbrella that cost more than one hundred guineas" "ninefoot" -> "nine-foot" and add conversion template. Consider adding an inflation template.

• • Conversion and inflation templates added.

• "The party totaled about 130." totaled -> totalled
• Totaled seems to just be the American spelling, but yeah I'll resort to the British spelling, thank you! (Done)

• Link "Kumasi"
  • Done

• "The officers employed which wore full diplomatic uniform, complete with scarlet jackets and swords were" Delete "which", full stop after "swords" and start a new sentence with "They"
  • Done!

• "and a new governor. Sir Charles McCarthy began to organise the Fante" Comma instead of full stop; comma after "McCarthy". Link "Charles McCarthy"
  • Done.

• "News of Sergeant Otetfo's capture" We presume he is the policeman, but should say so.
• Done.

• "Second West India Regiment" -> "2nd West India Regiment" and link to West India Regiments
• Done.

• "Lieutenant Colonel Purdon" Do we have a first name?
  • In the source there is no mention of a first name sadly.

• "Governor McCarthy" -> "McCarthy"
• Done

• What are "coboceers" ?
  • Added definition next to the word.

• "noncommissioned officers" -> "non-commissioned officers" and link
  • Done

• "defense" -> "defence"
  • Done

• "armory" -> "armoury"
  • Done

• Link Cape Coast Castle, Accra, Ashanti Kingdom, Osei Bonsu, Pra River (Ghana)
  • Done

• "the Governor of Sierra Leone, General Sir Charles McCarthy" "General" -> "Brigadier-General" and this introduction should have been in the previous section, where he first appears.
  • Done

• "Dr. Claridge concluded" Who was he? And delete "Dr."
  • Done and explained.

• Direct quotes need to be immediately followed by the source, even though they are the same as the rest of the paragraph
  • Sorry, I'm quite confused. Does this mean that you want me to use multiple sources per paragraph every time a quotation is used? Obviously this seems quite obvious, I'm just wondering why is this?

• Link Royal African Corps on first use
  • Done

• Who was Richter Aarestrup?
  • Explained

• "Mr. Williams" No first name? Drop "Mr."
  • Done, and there is no first name given.

• "and of his own offered all they could do to help" Don't understand this sentence.
  • Corrected.

• "This caused the Ashanti to lose effective control over the coast before palm oil exports had climbed to substantial levels." Link palm oil, and I am unsure what this sentence is about.
  • Done, and this sentence is in reference to palm oil exports later growing. I added more to ensure this is understandable.

• "hand over 600 ounces of gold" Add conversion template to convert troy ounces to grams
  • Done

• "Prah" -> "Pra" (several occurances)
  • Done

• "center" -> "centre"
  • Done

• "traveled" -> "travelled"
  • Done

• "wellpolished" -> "well-polished"
  • Mistake, done.

• "so that the algrove would not be destroyed, so that famine became the enemy's ally" Re-phrase to remove a "so that"
  • Done.

• "the enemy" Don't refer to them that way (WP:NPOV)
  • Changed, although left it where it's part of a quote.

• Oppong is not used
  • Removed.

• Sort the sources into alphabetic order (optional)
  • Done.

Will be back to check the references after this is addressed. Placing on hold. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 18:44, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Hey! Everything (or well almost) has been done. Please do check over some of my concerns. Setergh (talk) 20:27, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Or to be exact, what I responded with to "Direct quotes need to be immediately followed by the source, even though they are the same as the rest of the paragraph".

Also, when it comes to sources having to be sorted into alphabetical order, is this by title or by author surname? Setergh (talk) 20:30, 23 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Hawkeye7 Just to make sure you haven't missed this or anything. Setergh (talk) 20:45, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

The usual practice is to sort the works cited alphabetically by author surname. That's because the citations refer to them by surname. See British logistics in the Falklands War for an example. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:13, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, thank you! Setergh (talk) 21:35, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Done now. You've used the criteria and it seems to have passed, so could it please be promoted now? I'd also really like to thank you for reviewing this page! Setergh (talk) 21:38, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

And sorry to bother, do you think this page would be close to getting into even higher classes or for now definitely not close enough? Setergh (talk) 21:43, 24 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I suggest taking it to Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/A-Class review. It should pass with some prose changes. FAC would be more picky. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:35, 25 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Spot checks: 14a, 14e, 17, 21 - okay Hawkeye7 (discuss) 01:34, 25 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]