Talk:New York State Pavilion/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 01:08, 19 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 04:36, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. This will be the last of your nominations I review for a few weeks to ensure variety in reviewers. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 04:36, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Adding content as I go.

Finished this up. Not many things noted, mainly clarifications. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:47, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, didn't see you were on holidays. No rush, have a go at it when you get back. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 11:31, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave, no problem. Actually, I can take a look at these right now - I still have some internet access. – Epicgenius (talk) 17:28, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and contents

Should be changed from saying there were plans if they were just proposals, especially since proposals can't be "cancelled" Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:02, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The feasibility study was completed in the late 1990s, while the rest of the pavilion continued to rot.[145] redundant that the rest of the pavilion degraded while the study was being completed. What were the conclusions?
    • I actually had another look at the source - they were still working on the study at the time. (Later sources don't explicitly mention this study, but they do mention several other proposals, such as the 2001 aviation-museum proposal that's mentioned in the article. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • known during the World's Fair Block 46 as Block 46?
  • Several small planters were also placed around the map. In 2019 or originally?
  • Indiana's mural tricked some visitors into believing that the Theaterama was a restaurant, so the lights on his mural had to be turned off. could you clarify what this means?
  • The modern theater's entrance is through the "nebula" structure and this as well. Does it just mean a ring?

Suggestions

Sources

Spot check

1) In the years immediately after the fair, the Tent of Tomorrow hosted events such as a judo competition. Green tickY
2) and a local company offered to pay $6 million to renovate the tent into a roller rink. Green tickY
3) UCF began scanning the pavilion that June. Green tickY
4) Each cable measures 2.5 inches (6.4 cm) thick. Green tickY
5) Supposedly as retribution for the removals, Warhol created silkscreened portraits of Robert Moses, to which Johnson objected. Green tickY

Other

  • Images appropriately tagged Green tickY
  • Stable Green tickY
  • Neutral Green tickY
  • COPYVIO/OR Green tickY
  • Broad in its coverage Green tickY

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:26, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I've now addressed all the issues you brought up. Epicgenius (talk) 17:51, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Just one point about plans/proposals left. I won't hold up the review and just pass it, if you can address it how you see fit when you have the time. Thanks for another easy review. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:02, 3 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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