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Nominator: Launchballer (talk · contribs) 04:06, 15 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 02:44, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this review. Looks pretty good so far. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 02:44, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, done reviewing. Please use {{done}}, {{partially done}}, etc to respond to comments. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 03:35, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Launchballer: Almost there - just a handful of minor grammar edits (one sentences split, and consistently decapitalizing "slags"). Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:21, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Launchballer: Excellent work on a fascinating topic! Happy to pass this now. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:38, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

• The composer Andrew Barret Cox isn't mentioned in the prose at all; I recommend adding a sentence to the production section or citing his name in the infobox.
  •  Done Added to prose; wouldn't have needed a source for it being in the infobox as the show itself acted as a source, but I did find a secondary source that mentioned it. (Note to self: see if there's anything in [1].)
• Is a poster for the second season available? If not, I'd change the caption to Promotional poster for the first season to clarify.
  •  Done
• I recommend splitting the sentence beginning The first series... in two.
  •  Done
• Is Fantasia Royale Gaga a full presenter? if so, she should be mentioned in the same sentence as Camp and More.
  •  Done I rearranged the lede.

• Looking at articles for other reality TV series, it looks like many of them have a "format" section before the production section. I'd recommend considering splitting off some of this section (including the quote box) into a "format" section.
  •  Done
• There are a number of awkwardly long sentences in this article, such as the first three sentences in this section. Some, such as Camp and the programme's... have two completely different subjects. Splitting them would make the article easier to read.
  •  Partly done I find short sentences inhibit the flow of prose, but I trimmed all three.
    • I'm not asking for Hemingway, but there's a one more I'd recommend splitting: This series featured the same theme song...
      • I moved the first half of that sentence to the end of the previous paragraph as it made more sense there.
• Wikilink Matthew Camp and Chase Icon
  •  Done
• I don't think "commandeered" is the right word for taking over a business (except for perhaps a hostile takeover)
  •  Done Changed to "taken over".
• Use semicolons to separate list items in the sentence beginning Contestants on the show...
  •  Done
• Cut that sentence after "he/him" pronouns and split the remainder off - I recommend Four contestants were from England, with one each from Scotland, Mexico, and the United States.
  •  Done
• I'm not sure if "slag" needs to be capitalized, since some sources don't seem to.
  •  Done
    • Now there's a mix of capitalized/non-capitalized. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:21, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
      • I went through with Ctrl+F and I think I got them all.
• I'd recommend including a photo of Camp since one is available on Commons.
  •  Done

• This section should be moved below the season summaries to match other articles.
  •  Done

• These sections needs citations for the contestant information and episode titles, and preferably the progress tables as well
  •  Not done As far as I'm aware, contestant progress is covered by WP:PLOTSOURCE, and doesn't require referencing.
    • I won't insist on it then, but as a general suggestion I would still recommend adding any sources that are available. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:21, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]
• Is there a reason that Tyreece Nye's pronouns are given as "They/Them/She/Her", while other contestants using multiple pronoun sets are given as "She/They"?
  • They seem to use 'they/them' pronouns, so changed to that. (By way of disclosure, I haven't watched this, and don't especially plan to at least until it stops being paywalled.)
• Both seasons had a contestant quit - is any information about that available?
  • Wasn't able to find anything.
• The "Points Tally Board" table is not needed.
  •  Done
• Phases such as "Slag Wars Season 1 Episodes" and "Original Air Date" don't need to be capitalized
  •  Done
• Don't use small text for the guest listings.
  •  Done

• No need for this section - one term is already used in the text, and the other two aren't closely connected to this show.
  •  Done

Reference numbers are from this version.

• Several citations including 2, 3, and 20 are missing information such as author, date, and/or publisher
  •  Done I actually cut ref 3 as per WP:INDISCRIMINATE as it did not mention Slag Wars.
• Citations like 3 and 18 should use the website name rather than its url
  •  Done I went through and gave the whole reflist a cleanup. What else needs doing?--Launchballer 13:09, 30 March 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check.

   a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail: